This is a response to Taylor’s Improv of Komunyakaa's piece "My Father's Love Letters." This is a very good improv. However I feel as if some lines need clarification. Lines 5 and 6 are oddly worded to me. I believe I have grasp of what you meant but maybe you could go back and reword it a little. Also I really enjoyed the specificity of Subway. It reminds me of the parents who used to do the same thing at my school. “Every square inch swarmed with feet and flailing arms” I love that line, it’s a much better way of saying it was crowded.
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