Classmate Response Week 5, Response 1

This is a response to Debra’s free entry. Here’s the link http://kelleywisdom.blogspot.com/2012/02/free-entry_1070.html.

This is a deeply emotion based piece. The passion with which it was written shows vividly in the word choice in the piece. “The mourn of the native flute” is a great use of the unexpected, since flutes are usually associated with uplifting and jolly music. The overall tone and feelings of the poem reminds me of the stories my friend who is Native American shared with me. One note of improvement is adding more specificity to the abstractions in the piece. Perhaps there a specific dance that you could use to relate to the way the flute’s sound soars.