Friday, February 24, 2012

Classmate Response Week 6, Response 2


This is in response to Taylor’s Calisthenics. This is a great example of using the steps in dialogue that we discussed in class. The way the characters seem to carry on two different conversations, but are only having one is very true to conversations in real life. My only suggestion for this work is to make a stronger connection between Jackie’s last statement, and the main character’s line before that. 
For example: “But you didn’t hear that from me,” Jackie pleaded “Oh my god. Have you seen my wardrobe on Pintrest? I have this really cute pair of midnight blueberry shoes on there”.

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