This is a response to Kelsey’s Calisthenic. I know you said you didn’t aim for it to make sense but it does. The seemingly random pieces all tie together. This style of your work puts me in mind of the restraints poem I was asked to write in my other writing class. My favorite line is “not yet ripe stars”. This is one of odd pieces of language that Dr. Davidson mentions I also like the use of dialogue as an addition to the piece as well as a sort of interruption as well. I would like to see you do another piece like this from another “interrogation”. My only suggestion is rewording the line “between ghost towns and retirees”. The meter is a little odd in this line.
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