This is based off the metaphor substitution exercise in the Writing Poetry book.
1. His arms enveloped her like the ink stain from a broken pen.
2. Smug by the fire of their despair.
3. Wrapped in the buzz of her latest failure.
4. Capturing the memory of his worst date.
I love number 3! The buzz.. The first thing i think of is the buzz of being high and drugs, but then you smash that though next to failure. Great, unexpected combination that works! I can so see this in a great short story! Maybe even an epic first line!
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